3466	Assessment Initial Draft	Final Draft comments
Abstract	Well done.	Clear and includes an appropriate level of detail.
Research Question	The research questions are clear and sensible.  It might, however, be useful to make the most direct statement of those questions, opening of bottom paragraph on p. 1, stand out more.  Also, the simple term "factors" is perhaps too vague even in this context, so the proposal might at least provide examples.	Well done.
Literature Review	The literature review is well done.	Well done.  Excellent organization of ideas. Perhaps some of the introduction could be combined with the literature review to avoid repetition.
Data & Analysis	The data seem appropriate for the project and how the data will be used is explained clearly.	Well done.  More detail regarding analysis plan would be helpful, but the dataset and its usefulness are explained clearly.
Causal Interpretations	Stating generally that the hypotheses are based on the literature review leaves us a bit unclear what the proposal means.  Are they empirical expectations - essentially projections - based on the empirical patterns found in earlier research, without any particular causal foundation.  Or, are they empirical derivations from ideas about the mechanisms that differentially affect lawyers according to race and sex?  Either can be okay.  And for either, it helps if the proposal shows more clearly how the hypotheses relate to sources in the literature.	Well done.  Nuanced yet clearly stated.
Research Contribution	This is stated clearly in the introduction.	Well done.
Citations & Bibliography	The referencing structure is well done.	Well done.
Quality of Writing & Organization	Well written.	Well done.
Priorities for Revising / Responsiveness to Feedback	This draft proposal is in good shape.  Simply continue to develop.  Probably taking an initial look at the data while continuing to search the literature are most important.	Ideas were well-developed in first draft so not much revision was needed for the final draft.
Miscellaneous Notes	Note: last paragraph, p. 5, first sentence, "There is no doubt". Note: p. 6, perhaps set off that long paragraph with a subheading, or use a transition, as it seems ill fit and jarring as is.
Proposal		A strong proposal with which to go forward.
Class Overall		Excellent throughout the class.